After reading my second final draft for “The writing process is like or unlike…” I found that it was ten times better than my first draft. In this paper, there was an introductory paragraph labeling my key subtopics that I discussed throughout the essay. There was also a conclusion paragraph that summed up all of the key points (unlike the last draft, there was no concluding paragraph at all and I stopped writing in the middle of a key topic.) I found the essay to be organized; each paragraph had a point and each paragraph help take place of another in a smooth manner.
Although, there may need to be more examples or explanations that need to be in the paper but I don’t see it. The only vague point that I noticed was in paragraph two, when I was describing how my backhand needed to be improved on after I played my match. I could have given more detail on why it needed to be improved or why it was acting the way it was.
I’m not sure if I needed to give a short explanation on what tennis is, there could be a situation when the reader isn’t sure about it and the examples I give are hard to understand. Otherwise, if the reader was familiar to the game of tennis, the paper would be easy to comprehend.
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