After reading my second final draft for “The writing process is like or unlike…” I found that it was ten times better than my first draft. In this paper, there was an introductory paragraph labeling my key subtopics that I discussed throughout the essay. There was also a conclusion paragraph that summed up all of the key points (unlike the last draft, there was no concluding paragraph at all and I stopped writing in the middle of a key topic.) I found the essay to be organized; each paragraph had a point and each paragraph help take place of another in a smooth manner.
Although, there may need to be more examples or explanations that need to be in the paper but I don’t see it. The only vague point that I noticed was in paragraph two, when I was describing how my backhand needed to be improved on after I played my match. I could have given more detail on why it needed to be improved or why it was acting the way it was.
I’m not sure if I needed to give a short explanation on what tennis is, there could be a situation when the reader isn’t sure about it and the examples I give are hard to understand. Otherwise, if the reader was familiar to the game of tennis, the paper would be easy to comprehend.
Monday, September 28, 2009
Monday, September 21, 2009
teachers answer
Between four teachers: Sommers, Tinberg, Sanchez, and Rose, each one of them explains how they respond to student’s writings. For example, Sommers argues if teachers should comment or not comment on every little detail in a paper (from commas to paragraphs). If she were to write a comment, she makes sure there is a purpose behind the comment. Tinberg mentions he writes comments on papers to give advice. The grade doesn’t fully depend on how many red-penned side notes are listed; his comments are instrumental. The summative comments are there for a grade while the formative comments are there to help revise. Sanchez likes to give the students explanations for his written comments. He is straightforward and says what the paper is doing and tells how well the student did it. Last but not least, Rose gives compliments to students in a more physical way. He will put an arm around a shoulder and exaggerate on how well the student did in class today.
Monday, September 14, 2009
Revision
Now that I have read though it with the comments, I agree with…
· Improving word choice
· Putting in an introductory paragraph
· Include more evidence/detail of examples
I plan to change…
· My habit of not including introductory paragraph
· When I make an introductory paragraph, add in all my points o what will be in my essay.
· My word choice, decrease use of words such as “something, thing”
· Give more variety in word choice
I believe…
· My word choice can be poor at times
· that I am aware of not giving an introductory paragraph
· Improving word choice
· Putting in an introductory paragraph
· Include more evidence/detail of examples
I plan to change…
· My habit of not including introductory paragraph
· When I make an introductory paragraph, add in all my points o what will be in my essay.
· My word choice, decrease use of words such as “something, thing”
· Give more variety in word choice
I believe…
· My word choice can be poor at times
· that I am aware of not giving an introductory paragraph
persistance on writing
A question that has left people wondering: are people reading anymore? In today’s society, the multimedia has taken over written texts and English teachers are concerned with the issue. They are not completely against students using multimedia all the time but they are more worried about all written material disappearing because of using audio, video, or audiovisual technology. Although Crain makes it clear that reading comes with all sorts o benefits. For example, to learn, it requires reading and people who read on their own have certain skills in understanding written communication. Ong mentions how words sharpen a person’s analysis; it understands a reading without the help of emotions, gestures, or sound. He considers this a tool that must not be lost.
Writing can be seen as a “think for yourself” situation. Reading and writing is known for transforming the human consciousness and without it out our literate minds wouldn’t think the way it does. Even though the multimedia has taken over, both this and writing should still be taught. They each have their own set of purposes and effects that students need to experience.
Since when did multimedia become such an issue in the writing world?
Even though teachers care more for written material, what do the students consider as a better option?
Writing can be seen as a “think for yourself” situation. Reading and writing is known for transforming the human consciousness and without it out our literate minds wouldn’t think the way it does. Even though the multimedia has taken over, both this and writing should still be taught. They each have their own set of purposes and effects that students need to experience.
Since when did multimedia become such an issue in the writing world?
Even though teachers care more for written material, what do the students consider as a better option?
Saturday, September 12, 2009
questions 9/7/09
Barthlomae
Writing process is learning and understanding how to go beyond your comfort zone of writing.
Writing process is like being talented in a sport, yet there are still some things you can improve on. Writing process is unlike riding a bike. The day your set foot on a petal, you will always ride a bike the same. There is no improving in bike riding.
The cause of my writing is when I’m only assigned to write. Even though I only write when I have too I still enjoy it because after all the hard work and revising it, the feeling of having it done and knowing it’s a good paper is a great feeling.
The one scholar that supports my view of writing is professor Jeff Howard. He has graded a couple papers of mine and so far I like how he tells me what I can use some work on in a polite manner, on the other hand I also like his feedback on the good things I have done in my writing.
Elbow
Writing process is described as taking steps and becoming organized in writing a paper.
My writing process is compared to life in general. When I write I just go for it, there is no making of an outline. In life, I wake up every day not knowing what’s going to happen. I ask myself “will I meet new people today?” “Will something happen to change my mood drastically?” In writing I just write, I don’t now if I will come up with something or not to change my opinion in the essay. It’s more of surprising myself.
My writing process is associated with organizing and knowing what I’m going to do next. Having goals helps me get the paper done.
The parts of my writing process and how they relate to each other are just to start writing, there usually is no outlining and writing down what each paragraph will contain and in what order. I simply grab some paper and go for it.
Writing process is learning and understanding how to go beyond your comfort zone of writing.
Writing process is like being talented in a sport, yet there are still some things you can improve on. Writing process is unlike riding a bike. The day your set foot on a petal, you will always ride a bike the same. There is no improving in bike riding.
The cause of my writing is when I’m only assigned to write. Even though I only write when I have too I still enjoy it because after all the hard work and revising it, the feeling of having it done and knowing it’s a good paper is a great feeling.
The one scholar that supports my view of writing is professor Jeff Howard. He has graded a couple papers of mine and so far I like how he tells me what I can use some work on in a polite manner, on the other hand I also like his feedback on the good things I have done in my writing.
Elbow
Writing process is described as taking steps and becoming organized in writing a paper.
My writing process is compared to life in general. When I write I just go for it, there is no making of an outline. In life, I wake up every day not knowing what’s going to happen. I ask myself “will I meet new people today?” “Will something happen to change my mood drastically?” In writing I just write, I don’t now if I will come up with something or not to change my opinion in the essay. It’s more of surprising myself.
My writing process is associated with organizing and knowing what I’m going to do next. Having goals helps me get the paper done.
The parts of my writing process and how they relate to each other are just to start writing, there usually is no outlining and writing down what each paragraph will contain and in what order. I simply grab some paper and go for it.
Monday, September 7, 2009
Elbow-Bartholomae debate
David Bartholomae has had many discussions with Peter Elbow but in this discussion they decided to go public. David describes academic writing as something that is needed for an undergraduate to experience. Although he points out that academic writing is not writing of their own. It may prove what they have learned in school but it has nothing to do with them. David mentions how a student needs space to write on there own. For example, free writing, which is an open space to write with no pressure and is free from influences on culture or history.
Teachers are the ones who take on the responsibility of giving the correct advice to their students. Bartholomae sees teachers as managers but they have to be more than a manager who is just assigning topics. They need to consider their classroom as an open space.
If teachers offer the students a chance to have authority over there own writing then they will feel the pleasure of having power of what they put down on paper. If it weren’t for the classes and teachers having open spaces than students wouldn’t be able to be the person they see in other people’s writing.
Teachers are the ones who take on the responsibility of giving the correct advice to their students. Bartholomae sees teachers as managers but they have to be more than a manager who is just assigning topics. They need to consider their classroom as an open space.
If teachers offer the students a chance to have authority over there own writing then they will feel the pleasure of having power of what they put down on paper. If it weren’t for the classes and teachers having open spaces than students wouldn’t be able to be the person they see in other people’s writing.
Thursday, September 3, 2009
Peter Elbow
Peter Elbow expresses his special ways of writing for a catch-your-attention kind of paper. When he first started out in grad school, he realized his writing wasn't college material. He would try anything he could to improve his papers but it never succeeded; therefore he was kicked out. Eventually he came back to grad school to become an English professor.
To get to where he is today he mentions how he learned from failure. For 3 yeas he wrote letters and notes to himself about how he was writing at the time. As 3 years passed and reading as much as he could from the letters, it made him realize where he was strong and weak at in his writing. He uses the phrase "making a mess" as his way of planning what he is going to write. Clearly, he was not an outline-type of person and left him in knots. He takes about 5-15 minutes to write down his thoughts on a certain assignment or randomly jot down an idea about the topic. Later he would collect all the ideas and consider that his outline.
He also mentions "creating and criticizing" is important. Creating means generating ideas or taking anything that comes to mind. While criticizing your writing can be known as a picky job; such as spelling, and correct word use.
Questions:
1) How did he develop his writing skills, was it all on his own?
2) When did he consider writing a passion of his and how?
To get to where he is today he mentions how he learned from failure. For 3 yeas he wrote letters and notes to himself about how he was writing at the time. As 3 years passed and reading as much as he could from the letters, it made him realize where he was strong and weak at in his writing. He uses the phrase "making a mess" as his way of planning what he is going to write. Clearly, he was not an outline-type of person and left him in knots. He takes about 5-15 minutes to write down his thoughts on a certain assignment or randomly jot down an idea about the topic. Later he would collect all the ideas and consider that his outline.
He also mentions "creating and criticizing" is important. Creating means generating ideas or taking anything that comes to mind. While criticizing your writing can be known as a picky job; such as spelling, and correct word use.
Questions:
1) How did he develop his writing skills, was it all on his own?
2) When did he consider writing a passion of his and how?
Writing skills
Writing is something I enjoy when it's on a topic I have experience in or when it's a personal reflection. At times I do consider writing a struggle for me because of my weak use of strong vocabulary. I tend to use simple words and rarely use words that require a dictionary or thesaurus at my side (keep in mind these are the two best materials ever made). Although, I know for a fact that I can organize my writing. Meaning I can put writing in a chronological order from beginning, middle, and end. An example would be writing about the development of a tennis player. I would start out with the basic instructions on how to hit the ball correctly. Then I would continue on how to play competitive tennis successfully in tournaments. Finally I would describe tennis as an 80% mental game and 20% physical, (of course through out the essay I would give details and examples).
The one time in my entire writing career that I was successful at writing was my sophomore year of high school. It took place in a world history class, along with an intimidating, strict teacher. Our assignment was to write a 5-7 page paper on the Palace of Versailles. Starting out on this paper I had no understanding of what or where the Palace of Versailles is. Two weeks go by and the teacher has graded the paper and to my surprise he gave me an A+. He makes a huge seen about it to the class saying "see class this is what your paper should look like!" I felt like a queen for a day.
The one time in my entire writing career that I was successful at writing was my sophomore year of high school. It took place in a world history class, along with an intimidating, strict teacher. Our assignment was to write a 5-7 page paper on the Palace of Versailles. Starting out on this paper I had no understanding of what or where the Palace of Versailles is. Two weeks go by and the teacher has graded the paper and to my surprise he gave me an A+. He makes a huge seen about it to the class saying "see class this is what your paper should look like!" I felt like a queen for a day.
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